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Post by Fenris on Mon Sep 02, 2013 4:38 pm

This is a story I've been working on for a while.
Well, actually it is meant to be a prologue to a quiz series that I started to make.
It's set in an artificial dream world where you are controlled like pieces on a chess board. Each character represents a game piece. Though, this is only the first part of the prologue, and I haven't exactly finished it yet :PI'm working on it, very slowly, though! XD
Please don't copy! Or I'll hunt you down, and tickle you to death...with.this.feather!
-Holds up a small baby bird feather-  >:3  XD
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Dust flew across the grassy moor. The soft wind turned coarse as I ran; my bare toes sinking into the lush grass as I plowed forward. I could feel it, my heartbeat, it crashed against my rib cage; making my breath increase tremendously. Adrenaline rushed through my system in waves. Despite the strong wind and flickers of dirt threw across my vision, determination shone brightly within my squinting hues.

Move!

An order bellowed in my mind, telling my already aching feet to run faster. My throat felt as if it was burning; begging for air, I took a sharp intake of breath, the crisp air faintly soothing the sensation. There wasn’t a rock or tree in sight, until I approached my goal. With a slight curt nod, my right hand instinctively reached for the sheathed weapon on my left hip.  Unsheathing it in one smooth motion, I raised the small but thick curved blade in front of me; like a knight with a sharp lance.  But as decorative white vine coated pillars filled my view, a hint of nervousness floated to my throat.

What if this didn’t work? Getting to that entrance was all that mattered; for it was the only way. I shook the sickening feeling away as fast as I possibly could. Now was not the time for doubt. But truly the sad part was that I was the only one willing to undergo this task. Not a single other warrior was brave enough to take a stand this very day. Either that or they were smarter than I ever will be. But if I won’t do it, no one would. In that split second, everything else seemed to fade away. My mind clouded with an undetectable emotion, all I could focus on was my goal. I surprisingly was not bothered by it. For it had struck me down to my very core… giving me this strength that I was unaware that a man such as myself possessed. The Pillars seem to almost expand as I grew closer to the large heart sickening place; falling on either side of me, in a symmetrical formation. The blade remained still, firm but at the ready, as I charged.

Eagerness replaced the butterflies in my stomach as I finally spotted the top of the rough open coliseum. I was happy? The very thought made me cringe, but it was understandable. I was waiting for this moment for days now. Squatting behind old run-down building materials, and hiding from the patrolling warriors at every turn; waiting for the second where they all let their guard down. I was exhilarated to say the least; thrilled to be finally able to make a move. But, it didn’t feel right. Then, again it never does. As I dashed towards the fierce embodied doors, a hoard of guards covered my view. Each of them was equipped with small red clocks which wrapped ceremoniously around their necks.

The Daquilion caste? Here?

My eyes widened. The Daquilion Caste was a danger, in my own belief. Yet to the eyes of a beholder, this was typically not so. And as such, my target meant business. They were known as renowned scholars, but from the information I’ve gathered, it was only a sample of their skills. Daquilles are skilled combatants as well. This means, I had far more work cut out for me.  Great, just great.

Never the less I jumped forward; the dagger at the ready as I did so. “For the glory of the white pawn!” I shouted deeply, catching the attention of a robust full plated guard at the rear of the hoard; unsheathing his broad sword and barking a warning to the others. But luckily it was in vain. Unbeknownst until the last moment, the silver heavy plated guards, whipped around. And I attacked.
“The Pawn shall rise!” I hissed, ramming myself into the closest guard I could possibly find.  I began to vanish in the fray of armor; the sunlight gleaming throughout the once quiet meadow, glinting in any observers eyes like wild fire. I had started it….the battle, to enter the real world.  

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© <- See? Ish copyrighted! Don't steal please! :3
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Re: CheckMate

Post by Alphess Aiyana on Tue Sep 03, 2013 5:01 am

Ohh, that's so coool! I love chess. Very Happy
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Post by HowlingStar on Tue Sep 03, 2013 11:27 pm

You're such a talented writer! Smile
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Post by Alpha Okami on Wed Sep 04, 2013 2:08 am

HowlingStar wrote:You're such a talented writer! Smile
 
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Re: CheckMate

Post by Aurora on Wed Sep 04, 2013 8:43 am

That's amazing *O* Epic! You should do more (:
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Re: CheckMate

Post by Fenris on Wed Sep 04, 2013 5:03 pm

b(^_^)d YAY! THANKS! I'll try to write more, that is if writer's block allows me to! xD
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Post by Aurora on Wed Sep 04, 2013 10:11 pm

I hate writer's block Dx When I wrote fanfics, the only thing that kept me going were angry reviewers. ;P
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Re: CheckMate

Post by HowlingStar on Wed Sep 04, 2013 11:58 pm

BAD ANGRY REVIEWS. O_O Jason no like angry reviews. xD
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Re: CheckMate

Post by Fenris on Sat Sep 07, 2013 8:46 am

Me neither XD THEY ATTACK PEOPLE. O.o
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Post by Aurora on Sat Sep 07, 2013 9:59 am

Sometimes I just can't bring myself to read them. It's so frustrating.
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Post by Fenris on Tue Sep 10, 2013 6:06 pm

Agreed!
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Post by Mismatched on Tue Sep 10, 2013 10:59 pm

Awesome :3 More? This story has lots of thought in it.
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Re: CheckMate

Post by HowlingStar on Tue Sep 10, 2013 11:26 pm

Yeah, I agree! Write more! Very Happy
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Re: CheckMate

Post by Fenris on Mon Sep 23, 2013 5:03 pm

I'm working on it slowly, but I will post the next one very soon! I have to get a few characters done first though ^^;
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Post by Aurora on Mon Sep 23, 2013 5:28 pm

Eagerly waiting :3 You should put this up on a writing site and everything.
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Post by Fenris on Tue Oct 08, 2013 5:05 pm

Haha, I did xD
Sorry I'm taking so long to write more. There is a lot of other stories (and art!) that I need to post there in order to get accepted into different groups. study 
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Post by Aurora on Tue Oct 08, 2013 7:41 pm

Oooh, what's the site?
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Re: CheckMate

Post by HowlingStar on Tue Oct 08, 2013 7:53 pm

It's finee. Very Happy
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Post by Fenris on Wed Oct 09, 2013 4:41 pm

Aurora wrote:Oooh, what's the site?
DeviantART :3
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Post by Aurora on Wed Oct 09, 2013 6:34 pm

OHHH. Link me to your acc? >;3
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Post by HowlingStar on Wed Oct 09, 2013 7:45 pm

OHH. DA. :3 I once had an account there but lost the username and co. Razz
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Post by Aurora on Wed Oct 09, 2013 8:02 pm

I would link everyone but I'l extremely self-conscious because it contains my earliest drawings... Which were simply horrible. xD
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Post by Pigeon on Wed Oct 09, 2013 10:07 pm

I bet they're not horrible. Smile I bet they're awesome! Your cat drawings are really amazing.
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Post by Fenris on Sat Oct 12, 2013 8:19 am

Yeah Aurora, they will best mine any day Very Happy
If you really want to see what my DA account is like... it's not very pretty ^^;

Here is the link: [You must be registered and logged in to see this link.]

I don't have much on it right now mind you, but I'm working on it! cheers 
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Post by Aurora on Sat Oct 12, 2013 2:54 pm

Don't say that D: Everyone has their own unique style and it's really not fair to judge Razz
POKEMON.
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Re: CheckMate

Post by Lois on Sat Oct 12, 2013 4:47 pm

Honesty wrote:
HowlingStar wrote:You're such a talented writer! Smile
 
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Post by Alphess Aiyana on Sun Oct 13, 2013 3:23 am

Awesome DA account!
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Post by Aurora on Sun Oct 13, 2013 10:56 am

Right? Put more stuff on it! (:
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