BrightSpirit of VailentClan
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BrightSpirit of VailentClan
Name: BrightSpirit
Gender: She-cat
Appearance: Gray white she-cat with amber eyes. Darker flecks speckles her pelt.
Mate: None yet
Kits: None yet
Clan: ValientClan
Rank: Warrior
History: When Brightspirit was born it was a given shame. No one wanted her not even her own parents. To this day Brightspirit can be a nice she-cat. But other times she is a snappy cat.
RP style: Brightspirit lifted her nose to the air, scenting for prey. Suddenly a strong scent reached her nostrils. But it wasnt prey. Intruder! Brightspirit bounded towards the scent, rage flaring in her nose. Im getting closer. She thought. After a few fox lengths she came upon a feather. she looked up, Another feather!. Bright followed the feathers and gasped when she saw a dead robin. One she didn't kill.
Extras: Brightspirit is sometimes a snappy cat.
Referred by: N/A.
Skills: Hunting and Stalking
Skill she needs to work on: Social skills and Swimming.
Loyalty is what matters.
Gender: She-cat
Appearance: Gray white she-cat with amber eyes. Darker flecks speckles her pelt.
Mate: None yet
Kits: None yet
Clan: ValientClan
Rank: Warrior
History: When Brightspirit was born it was a given shame. No one wanted her not even her own parents. To this day Brightspirit can be a nice she-cat. But other times she is a snappy cat.
RP style: Brightspirit lifted her nose to the air, scenting for prey. Suddenly a strong scent reached her nostrils. But it wasnt prey. Intruder! Brightspirit bounded towards the scent, rage flaring in her nose. Im getting closer. She thought. After a few fox lengths she came upon a feather. she looked up, Another feather!. Bright followed the feathers and gasped when she saw a dead robin. One she didn't kill.
Extras: Brightspirit is sometimes a snappy cat.
Referred by: N/A.
Skills: Hunting and Stalking
Skill she needs to work on: Social skills and Swimming.
Loyalty is what matters.
Last edited by Brightspirit on Fri Feb 28, 2014 9:51 pm; edited 1 time in total (Reason for editing : RP style was a little bit short)
Brightspirit- Newborn
- Posts : 11
Join date : 2014-02-28
Age : 25
Location : Candyland
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(1/1)
Health Bar:
(100/100)
Character Mood:: Nervous theres a loose fox?!
Re: BrightSpirit of VailentClan
Looks good, but I'm going to ask you to lengthen your RP sample a bit. It doesn't have to be a huge paragraph, but just a couple more in depth sentences so we can get a better idea of your RP style.
Edit; I see you've edited it, Approved! Feel free to start posting, and Alue or an Admin will add you to the members group when they come online ^.^
If I may make a small suggestion however, you may want to work a little bit on your sentence structure, as you have a lot of short simple sentences. There's nothing wrong with that and they're still complete sentences so I'm still approving you, but when you read a bunch of them in a row it sounds a little blocky. Maybe try adding more compound/complex sentences when out RPing in the rest of the board? Otherwise it looks good and sounds realistic! :3
Edit; I see you've edited it, Approved! Feel free to start posting, and Alue or an Admin will add you to the members group when they come online ^.^
If I may make a small suggestion however, you may want to work a little bit on your sentence structure, as you have a lot of short simple sentences. There's nothing wrong with that and they're still complete sentences so I'm still approving you, but when you read a bunch of them in a row it sounds a little blocky. Maybe try adding more compound/complex sentences when out RPing in the rest of the board? Otherwise it looks good and sounds realistic! :3
Nightmare- Moderator
- Posts : 172
Join date : 2013-06-15
Age : 245
Location : under your bed
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Health Bar:
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Character Mood:: Curious but nervous.
Re: BrightSpirit of VailentClan
WELCOME TO THE FORUM.
MiseryCloud- Administrator
- Posts : 1897
Join date : 2013-07-17
Age : 28
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Health Bar:
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Character Mood:: ValiantClan are trying to take back the pines? Good luck to them is all I can say..
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